Due to the fact that the water was dirty, as soon as I looked back I saw in the river, two dirty legs (which looked like it was from someone) drowning in the river; it told me that this person was drowning when they were canoeing. ‘BLUB BLUB’
I felt like the person who was drowning needed help, so I decided I would do exactly that, but as I was pulling, I heard steps from behind. I felt skin touching me, saying to let go... It was my MUM TRYING TO FIND ME ALL THAT TIME! It was a prank!
Great partner work. You've built in suspense with ellipses and used lots of complex sentences.
ReplyDeleteEBI...adverbs and adjectives to describe.