Early Summer 793AD
Diary Account 2
Dear
Diary,
Today I am here at the settlement of rural
Strandebarn, the night before I venture to Lindisfarne.
Using all our power and strength, we skilfully
built the Serpent longship with a construction time of 8-9 months. As there
were no craftsmen to construct our vessel, building this Serpent longship unfortunately
it took nine long months, nine long months that felt like a WHOLE YEAR! The problem with Strandebarm is that it had no
farms around to provide sheep’s wool to make the huge white sail.
I
was furious! Despite the big sail taking a long time to construct, it will
however help make my vessel travel faster.
I
decided to get a very experienced navigator as he would guide me to Lindisfarne.
I also decided to get a carpenter as he would construct a very high quality
ship he would also know how to treat the wood.
Thinking
very hard, I had chosen to take route one as it looked quicker then route two.
It
feels like I have taken a big step in my life as I have never been on journey
like this before on the other hand I am very excited because I feel like I’ll
win.
The End
Excellent work Sumayya
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Wow, Sumayya has put quite a lot of effort into her writing and I can tell that she has been reading back.
ReplyDeleteWhat a fascinating account.
ReplyDelete:)Sumayya's mum.
I impressed by this writing Summaya. Its outstanding. I hope you right more pieces of wrighting like this!
ReplyDeleteGood work:)
ReplyDeleteWow! Amazing writing I can tell that you have put a lot of effort. Maria
ReplyDeletewell done sumayya! You did really well when we were partners. Hope you keep it up in your fourth diary entery.
ReplyDeleteNafisa
Wow Summaya! Your story qrighting is AMAZING! Keep the good work up! Imaan
ReplyDeleteWriting! Lovely comments Imaan. Miss M
DeleteI like it at least you didn't do subordinate, subordinate full stop. Like me LOL!!!
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Amina
I also wanted to say that for the last paragraph you could change it to a subordinate clause by wrighting it like this 'As I have never been on a journey like this before, It feels like I have taken a dig step in my life plus on the other hand I am very exited because it feels like we'll be the first boat back with the treasure! I WISH ^-^ :)
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Amina
Excellent advice Amina....you really understand this now! 5 table points to you. Do you need the 'on the other hand..' connective which is an opposing connective? Miss M
ReplyDeleteWow well done I can really tell that you have put a lot of effort into that. Keep up the good work. :)
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