Wednesday, 15 October 2014

Sumayya is ready to go.....

Early Summer 793AD
Diary Account 2

Dear Diary,
 Today I am here at the settlement of rural Strandebarn, the night before I venture to Lindisfarne.

 Using all our power and strength, we skilfully built the Serpent longship with a construction time of 8-9 months. As there were no craftsmen to construct our vessel, building this Serpent longship unfortunately it took nine long months, nine long months that felt like a WHOLE YEAR!  The problem with Strandebarm is that it had no farms around to provide sheep’s wool to make the huge white sail.
I was furious! Despite the big sail taking a long time to construct, it will however help make my vessel travel faster.
I decided to get a very experienced navigator as he would guide me to Lindisfarne. I also decided to get a carpenter as he would construct a very high quality ship he would also know how to treat the wood.

Thinking very hard, I had chosen to take route one as it looked quicker then route two.

It feels like I have taken a big step in my life as I have never been on journey like this before on the other hand I am very excited because I feel like I’ll win.

The End

13 comments:

  1. Excellent work Sumayya
    :)

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  2. Wow, Sumayya has put quite a lot of effort into her writing and I can tell that she has been reading back.

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  3. What a fascinating account.
    :)Sumayya's mum.

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  4. I impressed by this writing Summaya. Its outstanding. I hope you right more pieces of wrighting like this!

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  5. Wow! Amazing writing I can tell that you have put a lot of effort. Maria

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  6. well done sumayya! You did really well when we were partners. Hope you keep it up in your fourth diary entery.
    Nafisa

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  7. Wow Summaya! Your story qrighting is AMAZING! Keep the good work up! Imaan

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    1. Writing! Lovely comments Imaan. Miss M

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  8. I like it at least you didn't do subordinate, subordinate full stop. Like me LOL!!!
    By:
    Amina

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  9. I also wanted to say that for the last paragraph you could change it to a subordinate clause by wrighting it like this 'As I have never been on a journey like this before, It feels like I have taken a dig step in my life plus on the other hand I am very exited because it feels like we'll be the first boat back with the treasure! I WISH ^-^ :)
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    Amina

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  10. Excellent advice Amina....you really understand this now! 5 table points to you. Do you need the 'on the other hand..' connective which is an opposing connective? Miss M

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  11. Wow well done I can really tell that you have put a lot of effort into that. Keep up the good work. :)
    Sumayya's cousin.

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