Wednesday 27 November 2013

Musomic 100wc Aqib Haleema

MusoMic 100 WC As soon as we saw its monstrous face, we realized we were in his fearful grasp! We didn’t think; we didn’t stop and we didn’t care. Terrified, we darted towards shelter. A strange figure stood before us, which looked incredibly... superior. “I heard there was a beast on the loose,” the figure spoke. ” We are detectives who are trying to capture ‘it’,” I told her. “ I’m agent zero at your service.” Rushing, the three of us, gazed for the mysterious monster, which could have been lurking anywhere. In the clearing, we hesitated to stop in its territory; we didn’t dare... AH and HR
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3 comments:

  1. Y6 MVPS27 November 2013 at 09:16

    You have cleverly introduced a new character. Your final sentence is structured brilliantly.

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  2. Mr G, Sheffield, UK (Team 100WC)29 November 2013 at 06:08

    There's plenty of interest in your 100WC Aqib and Haleema, both in the plot and storyline and in the way you've crafted it. Some great sentence starters and carefully chosen vocabulary, but most of all I liked the repetition in the second sentence to emphasise the peril the characters were in.Well done.

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  3. Y6 MVPS5 December 2013 at 02:09

    Fantastic

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