Thursday 14 November 2013

Remembrance 100WC Mohammed

Remembrance The guns and tanks went BOOM, BANG. That was four years of my life that was horrible. The world war started in 1914; it ended in 1918. I remember tanks were blowing everything up. Families were also torn apart; it was disgusting. At first we reigned the battlefield, but then lots of our soldiers died. Lots of civilians died as well. The war ended, but it left so many scars on people’s hearts which were left behind. We remember the soldiers that passed away in the war. Poppies, the first plants that grew after the world war, now watch over the battlefield.
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  1. Y6 MVPS14 November 2013 at 06:49

    Excellent use of onomatopoeia and punctuation throughout. 'reigned' is a very powerful verb. Keep working on embedded clauses!

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  2. Anonymous18 November 2013 at 14:03

    This is a great 100WC, Mohammed. You choose some fantastic words throughout and the phrase "scars on people's hearts" is very poignant. I like the way you personify the poppies, as they "watch over the battlefield"- a very powerful image. Well done.
    Fiona (Team 100WC)

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